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Sips Co. Fairytale - Chapter 7Sips Co. Fairytale
Chapter Seven - Xephos and the Seven Dwarves
Part 7
By: MPNFF/CAM

Xephos’ night consisted of alcohol, crazy topics, and chatting with multiples of the same person. The usual. And, frankly, that one night was one of the best nights he had since the Queen entered the family. They had all stayed up until 2 in the morning talking about everything and anything. Well, everybody had stayed up until Sleepydew, who had somehow sneaked over to Xephos’ couch to snuggle up against his shoulder. But, Xephos didn’t mind. At that time he was too sucked into the backstory of Honeydew. He had also figured out Grumpydew&rsSips Co. Fairytale - Chapter 7 by ~MusicPnFFreak

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Flower For Your Thoughts (On Us)

Flower For Your Thoughts (On Us)
By: MPNFF/CAM

"Xeph?" An extremely familiar dwarf's voice asked. The spaceman in front of him, who was putting useless saplings in a cluttered chest at the time, turned around to face his best friend and companion, Honeydew.

"What is it?" He asked in a slightly distressed tone. There was just so much work to do! But when he noticed Honeydew's awkward expression, his mind wiped away those work thoughts and focused on Honeydew. The dwarf bit his lip as he stood with his hands behind his back and kicked his foot at the ground.

When he didn't answer, Xephos tried once again. "Friend?"

Quickly, Honeydew pulled Flower For Your Thoughts (On Us) by ~MusicPnFFreak

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Sips Co. Fairytale - Chapter 6Sips Co. Fairytale
Chapter Six - Xephos and the Seven Dwarves
Part 6
By: MPNFF/CAM

The Queen’s shoes clicked against the cobblestone stairs as she rushed down to her cellar. Usually, she only went down to her cellar for studying up on Black Magic or when she needed to fix issues with others. This was one of those times. Xephos was still out there somewhere, and just the mere thought of him made her blood boil. Once she reached the solid floor that made up her cellar, she rushed past the eerie hallway that led to the dungeon on a lower floor, and stopped abruptly at her bookshelf. Her long slender index finger glided along the old, dustSips Co. Fairytale - Chapter 6 by ~MusicPnFFreak

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so guys i got this review

by ~MusicPnFFreak, 2 days, 11 hours ago
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EDIT: Thanks for the advice, people, but does what I will put in italics in the review make sense?

... And I'm a bit uncertain about it. Tell me what you think about this...

"*Sniffs air* Do I smell Honeyphos? Haha.

Anyway, I'm a little brain-dead at the moment, so I'll only say a few things.

First of all; "He told the story of Honeydew, telling Xephos all about his old home which was in fact Stoneholm, and when he was kicked out, and from then on to survival and when he found the perfect place for a new start." The last part makes no sense. Just thought I'd point that out.

Also, it seems you're basing this off the Disney version of Snow White, which had the singing and the dwarf names, rather than the original Grimm brothers' version. Admittedly the original is a bit gruesome, but as far as i can tell the Disney version omits how the queen tried to kill snow white several other ways before the apple, with a very tight dress and a poisoned comb, both of which the dwarves saved her from. I know you've already set the stage for the apple, but I would've liked to see the dwarves saving Xephos several times. Look up the original on Wikipedia, if you're interested in the other version!

In other news, I'm still enchanted by the concept of Honeydew being split into multiples. Another thing I would've liked would be to specifically use Simon/Honeydew's personality, so rather than sleepy, grumpy, silent, bashful, happy, sneezy and ... stuttery, which as far as I can see are straight from the animation, you could have Hungry (for Jaffa's), Hyper (the bit of him that loves TNT), Bossy (the one with the poking stick from Tekkit), Hopeful (the... um...), Lazy (fatty fatty dwarf,) Flirty (hello Granny Bacon) and Accented (the dwarf of a thousand voices!)! but that's just my opinion. I just don't think that Honeydew is ever silent ;D.

On the topic of characters, the cleaning aspect of xephos makes sense. I would like to see him put torches everywhere or have a fear of the dark. Little references like that can make the character. Also, I just listened to a YoGPoD episode where Lewis was singing, and now I'm imagining him roaming around a palace singing like that. Hilarious. He has a really deep voice... kinda. I'm no expert.

Right. So that short review turned out longer than I expected. bleargh. Word vomit everywhere.

Last thing; you should do through all the characters in the Yogscast and put them all in a fairytale, but don't use a character twice. Well, maybe if they only had a minor role like Lomadia, but don't have another tale with the exact same main characters. I will do some research and come up with some suggestions."

Does it look like I need some sort of help, though? I realized all these things before I wrote this story... I knew that some stuff would be out of place, but... still! Does it matter? I mean, it's out of character in the slightest way, and I'm trying really hard to push it back into place, but I cannot change what has been written now!

How should I reply? Dear god...

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Hello, and welcome ~~to the Yogscast~~ to my page! Here you'll find a giant mix of writing and drawings. Enjoy your stay and I hope you'll find something that... tickles your fancy? Is your cup of tea? I don't know, haha.

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COUPLES I SUPPORT:

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Lewis and Hannah

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COUPLES I DON'T SUPPORT

Limon (SimonxLewis)

Femily (I just don't really like Emily. NO EFFENTS TO THE OC CREATOR.)

Pheobe + Joey, FRIENDS

Ross + Emily

Monica + Richard, FRIENDS

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